Keyword= Enunciation
Firstly, the audio of every side character was greater than yours. I had trouble understanding you compared to Toma Ego and Edd. Secondly, Artistically you needed to put more work into it. I get you were doing it in a short time frame, but add more frames, finish coloring, etc. While the artstyle can be considered, it only carries as an excuse for so long. Time constraints mean you have to put in the right amount of work primarily, then secondarily, doing the most important things first.